Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrates information about the location and types of dance classes by number of students and age group , in a town in Australia.

Overall, it is clear that around half of location of dance classes is on private studios and the less usable is the college-based studios. Furthermore the ballet shows highest number of student by the age of students under 11 while the second group indicated it's peak on the modern dance .

Looking at the details, the pie chard determinate that the half of location is taken by private studios with 48% while the lowest by the college based studios with 10% , then the School halls with a percentage of 24 % in other hand the community halls and others 18 %.

In comparison the bar chart shows the type of dance classes the first group, under 11 showed the highest result in the ballet course, and the lowest in the modern class, while the second group 11 to 16 marked the peak in the modern class and the decrease in the ballet we remark that it's reversed, while the othe class that called the tap shows a small difference be tween the two groups the second one is the highest with around 450 students and the first with around 420 students .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify several important features: private studios account for the largest share (48%), college-based studios the smallest (10%), and the age groups show contrasting preferences for ballet and modern dance. The overview is relevant, and your comparisons of the two age groups show a sound grasp of the main patterns. However, some details are inaccurate: under-11s have about 450 students in tap, while the 11–16 group has about 420, but you reverse these figures. Also, the second group’s peak is modern, while its lowest figure is ballet; make that contrast explicit. The location figures are mostly reported correctly, though the overview could summarise the age-group pattern more precisely. More accurate, clearly selected comparisons would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the pie chart and age-group data. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information. You also use comparison signals such as “while,” “in comparison,” and “furthermore” to connect features. At times, however, the long final sentence combines several comparisons, making the relationships harder to follow; the tap figures are especially difficult to track because their order is reversed. Some linking phrases, including “in other hand,” do not express the intended relationship clearly. Divide the final discussion into shorter sentences and use explicit references such as “the younger group” and “the older group” to make comparisons and data attribution clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “highest,” “lowest,” “peak,” and “in comparison,” so the main subject and trends are usually understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the less usable” for the least common location, “the pie chard,” and “marked the peak.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “determinate” and “othe,” which reduce precision. Some phrases repeat general terms such as “group” and “class” rather than naming the age category or dance style directly. Aim for standard chart language and check spelling; more precise choices would make your descriptions sound clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while,” and the overall meaning can generally be followed. However, errors in agreement, articles, prepositions, and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “The charts illustrates” should use a plural verb, and “half of location of dance classes is on private studios” has several grammatical problems. The final sentence is also overloaded, with unclear clause boundaries and punctuation, which makes the comparisons difficult to process. Work on accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build comparisons with controlled clauses—for example, one sentence for each age group and a separate sentence for tap. Check subject–verb agreement and article use when editing.

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