Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The diagram below provides data on the areas and kinds of dance classes that teenagers in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The given data is about the places of learning and by it's age.

the given dta is about the place of learning which ids disrtributed in differents ways like the first one is community which is 18% and second is school hall which percentage is 24%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the topic as dance-class locations and types, and correctly report that community halls account for 18% and school halls for 24%. However, the response is far too incomplete to summarise the charts: it gives no overview, omits the private-studio and college-based figures, and does not compare the dance styles across the two age groups. The phrase “by it's age” signals an intended comparison, but no supporting information follows. The response also contains only 61 words, below the required 150, which leaves the task minimally addressed. To improve, write a clear overview of the main patterns, then select and compare key figures from both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to introduce the subject and then mention two location figures, so the reader can follow the limited information that is present. However, the response has no developed paragraph structure or clear progression through the two charts. The repeated opening, “The given data is about…”, does not help organise the report, and the final sentence stops after two location categories without linking them to the other locations or dance types. Use a short introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs. Connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast the largest location share with the smaller shares, then compare the age groups’ preferences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “dance classes”, “community” and “school hall”, which makes the general subject recognisable. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are imprecise for describing charts: “areas and kinds” and “places of learning” are less natural than “locations” and “types of classes”. There are also spelling errors such as “dta” and “disrtributed”, and “community” alone is not the chart’s full category label. Build a more accurate range of chart language, including “accounted for”, “share”, “proportion”, “students” and “age group”, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements, such as “the first one is community which is 18%”, and the intended meaning is generally recoverable. However, sentence structures are very limited, and errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement and punctuation reduce control. The opening “The given data is about the places of learning and by it's age” is not a complete, well-formed comparison; the apostrophe in “it's” is also incorrect in this possessive context. The final sentence is a long, loosely joined construction with repeated “which”. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related information with controlled clauses, such as “Community halls account for 18%, while school halls make up 24%.”

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