Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the information on the spot of dance classes and the bar chart compares the different typs of dance classes participated by young people in a town in Australia at recent.

Overall, private studios are accounted the largest location of dance classes, while college based studios showed the smallest figure.And the large number of students particapating the Ballet type of dance classes who are under 11 and the modern types of dance classes by 11-16 age group showed the major number.

In pie chart, private studios accounted the 48% of dance classes which displayed the large figure.Community halls and other showed 18% of dance classes, while school halls accounted 24% after academic classes and college based studios considered the lowest figer which is 10%.

In bar chart, there are almost 600 students in Ballet, approximately 450 students in Tap and around 300 students in modern types of dance classes who are under 11 years, while the age group from 11 to 66 are showed near 300 students in ballet, over 420 students in tap and close 510 students in modern dance classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are smallest at 10%. You also report the key age-group figures for all three dance styles, and most are close to the chart values. The overview makes a useful comparison between the strongest categories, although its wording is unclear and it does not clearly summarise the contrasting age-group preferences: under-11s favour ballet, whereas 11–16-year-olds favour modern dance. The reference to “11 to 66” is inaccurate; the chart shows ages 11–16. To strengthen the response, state the main contrasts precisely in the overview and ensure age ranges and comparisons are reported accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the pie and bar charts. This makes the two sources easy to follow, and phrases such as “while” help signal comparisons. However, progression within the overview is weakened by the unclear sentence beginning “And the large number of students…”, and some links between details are mechanical or incomplete. For example, the location paragraph lists percentages but does not consistently frame them as shares of the total, while the final paragraph places several figures in one long sentence. Use complete, parallel comparisons and clearer transitions between age groups and dance styles to make the information flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted,” “approximately,” “age group,” and “figure,” so the reader can generally understand the data being described. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors reduce precision. Examples include “spot” for location, “at recent,” “participacating,” and “the large figure”; “accounted the 48%” is also an unnatural expression. Repetition of “dance classes,” “showed,” and “figure” makes the report less flexible. Aim for accurate, natural combinations such as “accounted for 48%,” “the largest proportion,” and “students enrolled in ballet,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “while,” and the main data can usually be understood. However, control is inconsistent: several sentences contain faulty structures or missing grammatical elements. For instance, “private studios are accounted the largest location” needs a passive or active construction such as “private studios account for the largest share,” while “college based studios showed the smallest figure.And” has a punctuation error and an awkward tense shift. The overview fragment beginning “And the large number…” is not a complete, well-formed sentence. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction in “accounted the 48%.” Practise accurate clause formation and proofread punctuation and verb patterns.

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