Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This pie chart illustrate types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia. This is shows us location of dance classes.

The most important class is Private studios the people are not like to dance in front of public so, they are dance in private abd cannot show their about privacy. It have the 48% of public mostly have like to this and they are like to tearn other countries dance. School halls are make learn to students after complete study. They learn to their traditional civilization and the dances who are related to their culture. Schools are play an important rule to give training it become 24% of public. Community halls are arrange day and nights clubs and parties for public. People are take part in 18%. College based studios are low level people are not have interest in it. The students of college are not like so much dance it become 10% of public.

In conclusion, ballet is high by the numbers of privates studios around 600 and community halls are 300 of total. Tap rise up 450 by the students of college and college-based studios but school halls have 400. Modern is high by numbers of community halls around 530 but college students have 300 interest in it. Overall this piechart shows us comparison between location of dance classes in Australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main subject and report several location percentages, including private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, community halls at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it gives no clear overview of the main patterns and repeatedly adds unsupported explanations about privacy, culture, and students’ interest. The final paragraph misattributes the dance-style figures to locations—for example, ballet’s 600 students are not “numbers of private studios,” and modern’s 530 is not supported by the chart. The age-group comparisons are also confused: under-11s favour ballet, while 11–16-year-olds favour modern. Focus on accurately describing the two charts and comparing their key features, without speculating about reasons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate opening, body, and concluding paragraphs, and it attempts to group information about locations before discussing dance types. This gives it some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the body mixes chart reporting with invented explanations, while the conclusion introduces figures without clearly connecting them to the correct chart or age group. Linking phrases such as “In conclusion” do not resolve this confusion, and repeated references to “public” make relationships between figures unclear. A clearer structure would use one paragraph for the location percentages and another for the age-group comparisons, with a concise overview before the details. Use comparisons and references that make it clear which chart and group each figure describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “community halls,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern,” so the reader can recognise the topic. However, the vocabulary is basic and often repetitive, and inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand. Phrases such as “the most important class” and “low level people” do not describe the chart data appropriately; “public” is also used repeatedly where “students” or “participants” is intended. There are spelling and word-form errors, including “abd,” “tearn,” and “piechart.” Build a more precise range for describing proportions and comparisons, such as “accounted for,” “was the most popular,” and “compared with,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the meaning unclear. For example, “This pie chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “This is shows us” combines incompatible verb forms. Other problems include “It have the 48%,” “People are take part,” and “Schools are play,” where verb forms and agreement are incorrect. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, as in the long sentence beginning “The most important class is Private studios.” These errors affect the reader’s ability to understand the intended comparisons. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses, and check articles, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation.

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