Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie and bar chart illustrate the data on the location and types of dance classes young individuals in a city in Australia are recently joining.

Overall, private studios accounted for the highest percentage of location of dance classes, whereas college based studios was the lowest proportion. However, under 11 age group showed the downward trends and 11-16 age group made up upword trends by the end.

private studios accounted for 48%, which was the largest proportion in location of dance classes. Followed by school halls (after -school), made up 24%; moreover, community halls and other were at 18%. Finally, college-based studios was recorded at 10%, which was the lowest percentage in this charts.

Turning to the bar charts, under 11 age group significantly higer at 600 number of students in ballet; then, it sharply decreased approximately 450 number of students in tap. By the ending point, stabled at 300 number of students in modern. Nonetheless, 11-16 age group was initially at 300 number of students. After that, it dramatically grew reaching around at 520 number of students in modern.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify the main location figures accurately: private studios are largest at 48%, while college-based studios are smallest at 10%. You also attempt an overview comparing the age groups. However, the overview’s claim that the groups show opposing “trends” is unclear because the bar chart compares dance styles, not change over time. Some key comparisons are omitted: under-11 students are highest in ballet, while the 11–16 group is highest in modern; tap numbers are similar. The description of the older group is especially incomplete, as it gives only the ballet and modern figures and does not report tap. Select and compare the main features more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations and a paragraph on dance styles. This makes the information easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall” and “Turning to the bar charts” help signal shifts. The progression within the final paragraph is less effective, however: “initially,” “After that” and “By the ending point” suggest a timeline, although the categories are dance styles rather than stages in time. The repeated sequencing also obscures the direct comparison between age groups. Organise the bar-chart details by style or compare the two groups within each style, and use linking phrases that express comparison rather than sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “proportion,” “percentage” and “dramatically grew,” and the chart categories are generally identifiable. Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “recently joining,” “highest percentage of location,” “stabled at” and “reaching around at.” “Upword” is also misspelled, and “significantly higer” contains a spelling error. These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Prefer standard chart language such as “attending,” “share,” “stood at” and “reached approximately,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the contrast introduced by “whereas” and the clause beginning “which was the lowest percentage.” The main information is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “college based studios was” has subject–verb disagreement, and “under 11 age group” needs an article and a more complete noun phrase. The sentence beginning “Followed by school halls” is a fragment, while “made up upword trends” has an unclear grammatical construction. There are also awkward sentence patterns in the bar-chart description, such as “under 11 age group significantly higer at 600.” Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and articles.

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