Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrate the information on the location and types of dance classes young individuals in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overview, the large amound of young people are taking dance classes at private studios. The college based studios are at least occupied by the young people.

According to chart many of young people are taking dance classes at private studios which is 48%. On second in the school halls dance classes are going which is around 24%. At third community hall are occupied by the youung people for dance classes which is around 18% and in the end college based studios are occupied by the young people for the classes.

In conclusion, there are four location of studios where dance classes are going. all of them occupied by the young people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the main location pattern correctly: private studios are the most popular at 48%, while college-based studios are the least used. You also report the school-hall and community-hall shares approximately accurately. However, the response omits the entire second chart showing dance styles by age group, so it does not summarise all the information or make the key comparisons between age groups. The final sentence merely repeats that there are four locations and adds no useful data. The response is also 34 words below the required minimum; 18 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, include an overview of the age-group pattern and compare the figures for ballet, tap and modern, while developing the report to the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: an opening, an overview, a paragraph listing locations, and a concluding sentence. This makes the general topic easy to follow. However, the organisation does not create a clear progression through both charts, because the dance-style data is absent and the conclusion repeats the opening idea rather than synthesising the main features. Linking phrases such as “On second,” “At third,” and “in the end” attempt to order the figures, but they are repetitive and sometimes awkward. Group the information into a clear overview and focused detail paragraphs, and use comparisons to connect related figures rather than simply listing locations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “college based studios,” and “48%,” so the reader can identify the subject and several key categories. However, the range is limited and repeated: “young people,” “dance classes,” and “occupied” recur, with “occupied” not being a natural way to describe attendance or popularity. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “amound” and “youung,” and the phrase “large amound” is imprecise. Use concise reporting language and vary expressions—for example, “accounted for,” “the most popular location,” and “the proportion of students attending.” Accurate spelling and natural collocations would make the report clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the basic meaning is generally recoverable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “The chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Overview, the large amound of young people are taking…” lacks a well-formed introductory structure. Articles and plurals are also problematic in “there are four location,” and the sentence “At third community hall are occupied…” has an unclear construction. The response shows little variety beyond short statements and repeated present-tense patterns. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons such as “More students attend ballet than modern classes among under-11s.” Check agreement, articles, plural endings and sentence punctuation when editing.

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