Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrate the data of location and Section of dance classes of gentle man in a city in australia are currently attending

Overall , Private studios Hits 48% which is top on the chart and under 11 ages involve in ballet dance which is accurate on 600 students. additionaly, Tap Dances level around 450 (under 11) and some avobe from 400 (11-16) Ages Which Is low rather than two others .

First Of All , Ballet Dance In Private studios Its Hits Most which is 48% in the Chart and under 11 ages child Recorded The number of student To 600. Section of Tap Dances private studios and halls of others both are increased Simillarly.

In the terms of , Modern Dance Its Chosen by Uper than 500 students , Which Located in Halls & Others. And In the Private Studios , There Is Exactly 300 Students .

Notably , There Is Some Students In Other Two Sectors ( School Halls, After School ) wich is Level In 24% . And another one Is College-Based Studios, Which Is Only 10% In this Chart.

Conclution , There Is Lot Of Student Who Is Practise Their Dances In Different Location And Different Number Of student Are Also There. But In my Opinion , Ballet Dance Prefer So Much Student And Its Top Data Of This Pie Chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant features, including private studios as the largest location share (48%), college-based studios as the smallest (10%), and the high under-11 figure for ballet (about 600). However, the response only partially summarises the charts because some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. For example, you say modern dance has “Exactly 300 Students” in private studios, although the chart gives 300 under-11 students for modern dance and does not connect that figure to a location. The claim that tap in “private studios and halls of others” increased similarly is also unsupported by the data. Give a clear overview of the main contrasts between age groups and report the two charts separately, without linking categories that are not related.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts an overview followed by details, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because location percentages and dance-type figures are repeatedly mixed together. For instance, “Ballet Dance In Private studios” combines information from the two charts, while the paragraph about modern dance again links its student total to a location. Connectors such as “First Of All,” “In the terms of,” and “Notably” do not consistently clarify how the information relates, and the concluding paragraph repeats a general point rather than synthesising the comparisons. Organise the report into a location paragraph and an age-group comparison paragraph, using clear references to each chart.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “private studios,” “college-based studios,” “ballet,” and “students,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “Hits 48%,” “Section of Tap Dances,” and “Chosen by Uper than 500 students.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “Simillarly,” “Conclution,” and “Practise,” are also noticeable. Use precise reporting language for charts, such as “accounted for,” “was attended by,” and “compared with,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid describing figures as “top” or “hits”; these expressions are not natural in an academic data summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer sentences, but most structures are simple or incomplete, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Examples include “The pie chart illustrate,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “under 11 ages involve in ballet dance,” which has an unclear verb construction. Capitalisation is inconsistent, and commas are often placed awkwardly, as in “Overall ,” and “In the terms of ,”. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise writing clear comparative sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement, for example: “Ballet was more popular among under-11s, whereas modern dance attracted more students aged 11–16.”

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