Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart ilustrate on the location and type of dance young nation in a town in australia are now attending so location of dance conseder in the difrent there are two type one black and gry .

the most bigest changes in ballet its come to zero on 600 and ballet come to something these are under 11 and the under 16 come to something 300 but Tap is smothly treand but same like a under 11 move on 450 and under16 grow up 420 and modren the smallchanging in dance classes the under 11 shipt on 300 but the under 16 big move on 520.

there are studios private studio grow up to 48% and these steduents are under 11 age but some sodios like hall comunity the main changing under 16 move to 18 percents and school hall come to 24% after the school and college base are lower only 10% move up .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both subjects—the locations and the dance styles—and include several relevant figures, such as 48% for private studios and approximately 600 under-11 students in ballet. However, the response only minimally summarises the charts: it does not give a clear overview of the main patterns, and some comparisons are inaccurate or confusing. For example, the 18% figure for community halls is not specifically an under-16 result, and the age groups are described unclearly in the discussion of tap. The key contrast that ballet is most popular among under-11s while modern is most popular among 11–16-year-olds is not clearly stated. Select the main trends, report them accurately, and separate the location data from the age-group comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an opening, a paragraph about dance types, and a final paragraph about locations. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is divided. However, there is no clear progression within the paragraphs, and ideas are often joined in long, confusing strings, particularly in “but Tap is smothly treand but same like a under 11 move on 450.” Linking words such as “but” are repeated without showing a clear contrast, while references such as “these students” are difficult to interpret. Use one paragraph for the overview and one for each chart, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, “By contrast” or “whereas”—so the reader can follow each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “ballet,” “Tap,” “modern,” “private studio,” and “college base,” and you attempt to describe movement with phrases such as “grow up” and “big move.” However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices strain understanding: “ilustrate,” “conseder,” “difrent,” and “smothly treand.” Some phrases are also unsuitable for describing chart data; “ballet come to zero on 600” does not clearly express that the figure is about 600 students. Build a small set of accurate reporting expressions, such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” “was higher than,” and “increased to,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and include comparisons, but sentence structures are very limited in control, and frequent errors make several points difficult to understand. For example, “The chart ilustrate on the location and type of dance young nation … are now attending” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “the under 16 come to something 300” has an unclear verb pattern. Articles, plurals, and agreement are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “the most bigest changes” and “these are under 11.” Use short, complete sentences first, with a clear subject and verb, then add comparisons using a controlled pattern such as “The figure for ballet was 600 among under-11s, compared with 300 among older students.”

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