Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The linear representation illustrates the information related to the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
firstly, the pie chart illustrates to the location of dance classes. it private studios has 48%. Moreover, its college-based studios has10%.Its school halls (after-school) has 24%. Nevertheless, its community halls & other has 18%.
Second, the type of dance classes ( by age group) number of students for Ballet (under 11) has 600. However, its (11-16) age students has nearly 300. Furthermore, the number of students for tap (under 11) has around 450. But, its (11-16) age students has 420.
Moreover, the number of students for modern (under 11) has 300. However, its (11-16) age students has nearly 520.
Overall, it is clear for a chart higest classes is private studios. Moreover, type of dance classes has ballet
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify both chart topics and report several figures accurately, including the 48% share for private studios and the age-group figures for ballet, tap and modern. However, the response is under the required 150 words: it contains 130 words, with 13 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. The overview is also unclear and incomplete. “Private studios” is correctly identified as the largest location, but “type of dance classes has ballet” does not explain the main age-group contrast: ballet is most popular among under-11s, while modern leads among 11–16-year-olds. Develop this comparison and state the key features clearly to address the task more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic sequence: it first describes the location chart, then compares the dance types by age group, and ends with an overview. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weakened by repetitive and sometimes unsuitable linking words, such as “Moreover,” “However,” “But,” and “Nevertheless,” which do not always show a meaningful contrast or addition. The final overview is disconnected from the preceding details and does not clearly summarise them. Use separate, clearly developed paragraphs for the two charts and a concise overview, then connect comparisons directly—for example, contrast ballet’s higher under-11 figure with modern’s higher older-group figure.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “age group,” and “number of students,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, which makes some information harder to follow. “The linear representation” does not accurately describe these visuals, and “it private studios has 48%” is not a natural way to report a proportion. Repeated use of “has” and basic connectors also limits precision. Choose standard data-reporting language such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” and “was higher than,” and use “bar chart” or “charts” rather than “linear representation.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Most of the response relies on short, simple statements, with limited evidence of varied sentence structures. Frequent errors in sentence formation and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “it private studios has 48%” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “its college-based studios has10%” has an incorrect subject–verb relationship and missing spacing after the number. Capitalisation is also inconsistent after sentence breaks, as in “firstly” and “it.” There are attempts to link clauses with “However” and “Moreover,” but these do not compensate for the limited range and faulty constructions. Practise accurate patterns such as “Private studios account for 48%” and “Ballet attracts 600 under-11 students, compared with 300 aged 11–16.”
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