Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The linear representation illustrates the information related to the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia country are currently attending.

Firstly, the pie chart illustrates of loction of dance classes. it private studios is 48%. But, it college-based studios have 10%.

Moreover, it school halls ( after- school) is 24%. However, it community halls & other location is 18%.

The bar graph illustrates the type of dance classes (by age group (under 11 or 11-16). Firstly, ballet dance classes ( under 11) students is 600. Nevertheless, it young people is around 300.

Furthermore, tap dance classes aged (under 11) have nearly 450. But, it number of students aged (11-16) is 420. Moreover, modern dance classes aged (under11) have 300. Therefore, it number of students aged (11-16) have near 510.

Overall, it is clear this chart higest dance classes is private studios. However, it is clear this bar graph higest dance classes is ballet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report figures from both charts, including the 48% share for private studios and the age-group numbers for ballet, tap and modern, so the response is relevant to the task. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: saying ballet is the bar chart’s “higest” category overlooks that ballet leads only among under-11s, while modern is highest for ages 11–16. The response also gives little comparison between the age groups and does not clearly summarise the main patterns. The required minimum of 150 words is not met: the response is 145 words, with 14 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. To improve, add a concise overview and compare the leading dance styles across both age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: it introduces the charts, discusses the pie chart, then the bar chart, and ends with an overview. This makes the two sources of information identifiable. However, progression within the paragraphs is often mechanical, with repeated “Firstly,” “Moreover,” “But,” and “However,” sometimes used where no contrast is needed. The final overview repeats a claim rather than drawing the main comparisons together. Some references, such as “it” in “it private studios is 48%,” also make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Group the bar-chart figures by age group or dance style, use clearer links to show comparisons, and reserve the overview for the most important overall patterns.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “private studios,” “school halls,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being described. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, including “linear representation” for the charts, “loction,” and “higest.” Phrases such as “the type of dance classes” and “number of students” are repeated, while “young people in a town in Australia country” is awkward and imprecise. These errors sometimes make the description harder to understand. Use standard chart-reporting language and more precise comparison terms, such as “accounted for,” “approximately,” “higher than,” and “the most popular style.” Check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few different sentence openings and uses simple clauses to report figures, but its grammatical range is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “it private studios is 48%” lacks a workable subject structure, and “community halls & other location is 18%” has problems with number agreement. The sentence “the number of students aged (11-16) have near 510” also has an incorrect verb form and an incomplete comparison. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in the lowercase “it” after a full stop and the spacing around parentheses. Practise accurate patterns such as “Private studios account for 48%” and “There were about 520 students aged 11–16 in modern classes,” then combine these with a few controlled comparison clauses.

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