Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two charts ilustrate the location and types of dance classes young people are currently attending in Australia

Overall, it's noticeably that the private studios dominated the pie chart with roughly a half of the chart. Meanwhile, number of people under 11 in ballet are the highest and in modern, the number of people from 11 to 16 took the lead.

Regarding the first chart, classes in the private studios dominate the chart with roughly 50%. Meanwhile, the dance classes that take place in school halls are a half from private studios, which is 24%. In contrast, the dance classes take place in community halls and college-based studios are the lowest, the addition of them is about one-third of the chart

In the bar chart, people under 11 attend to ballet reach the highest, way higher than from 11 to 16. That number stay almost the same when it comes to tap dance, where number of under 11 reach 450 and 11 to 16 barely at 420. About the modern dance, the number of 11 and 16 surge to reach roughly 500 while people from under 11 dip gradually throughout the type of dances

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern—that private studios account for the largest share—and compare the age groups across dance styles. The figures for school halls (24%) and tap (450 versus about 420) are also broadly accurate. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly summarise the full range of location shares or the contrasting patterns across all three dance styles. Some comparisons are imprecise or misleading. Community halls and college-based studios are not each the lowest; together they make up 28%, while college-based studios alone are the smallest category at 10%. Also, the under-11 ballet figure is about 600, compared with 300 for older students, rather than simply “way higher.” Select and report the key figures more precisely to develop the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the two charts. This helps the reader follow the broad subject, and linking expressions such as “Meanwhile” and “In contrast” show attempts to connect comparisons. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links do not express the relationship accurately. For example, “the addition of them” refers vaguely to two location categories, while the final sentence moves from modern dance to a general claim about a gradual decline across dance types. Repetition of “Meanwhile” and “the chart” also makes cohesion mechanical. Use clearer references and organise each chart’s figures in a consistent sequence, with comparisons grouped by age or category.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern,” and terms such as “dominated” and “surge” show an attempt to describe trends rather than merely list data. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which reduces precision. “The addition of them” is not a natural way to describe combined shares, and “people ... took the lead” is awkward for reporting chart values. There are also spelling and word-form slips, including “ilustrate” and “noticeably” where “noticeable” is needed. Build a more precise set of chart-reporting phrases and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example, “where number of under 11 reach 450 and 11 to 16 barely at 420.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur in basic sentence patterns as well as more complex ones. Examples include the missing article in “Meanwhile, number of people,” the agreement error “That number stay,” and the incomplete construction “11 to 16 barely at 420.” The final sentence also has an unclear subject and faulty verb forms in “the number ... surge” and “people from under 11 dip.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention, too, as the opening lacks a full stop. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete comparisons before adding more complex structures.

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