Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart demonstrates that to give the details on the site and the categories of dance classes young individuals in a place in Australia are at present attending.While, the bar graph also shows the types of dance classe by age group.
overveiw, in the pie chart the significant is taken by privat studios which is 48%. Moreover, the minor portion of the pie chart is college bassed studios which is 10%.
The 2nd major part of the pie chart is the gray portion school halls (after schools) that is 24% and the 2nd lower part of pie chart is located in cumunity halls and other the black portion which is 18%
overveiw, the bar graph illustrates the types of dance classes by age group under 11 and under 11 to 16. Ballet is the most common part in under 11 age group which is attend by 600 students and under 11 to 16 attend ballet around 300 students.Tap is the 2nd common part in under 11 and 11 to 16 which is 400 and 470 ratio. and the most common part of dance in under 11 to 16 is modern which is atend 500 students and under 11 300 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You cover both charts and report the main location figures accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are the smallest at 10%. You also identify the key age-group contrasts: ballet is highest among under-11s, whereas modern is highest among 11–16-year-olds. This gives the response relevant coverage of the task. However, the overview is not clearly separated from the details, and some comparisons are imprecise: tap is about 450 versus 420, rather than 400 versus 470. The opening mostly restates the prompt, and the response would be stronger with a concise overview of the main patterns before supporting figures. Ensure each reported value and age-group label matches the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic structure, moving from the pie chart to the bar chart, and the reader can generally follow which data is being discussed. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven. Repeating “overveiw” to introduce information does not create a clear overview, and connectors such as “Moreover,” “The 2nd major part,” and “and” are used mechanically or awkwardly. The pie-chart details could be grouped in a more logical order, followed by a separate paragraph comparing the dance types across age groups. Use clear topic sentences and link comparisons directly—for example, contrast ballet’s higher under-11 figure with modern’s higher older-student figure. This would make the organisation more purposeful and reduce repetition.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant task vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “bar graph,” “age group,” “portion,” and “students,” so the topic is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make the description less precise, such as “the significant is taken by,” “minor portion,” and “attend ballet.” Repeated use of “part” and “common” also limits variety when describing proportions and popularity. Choose standard chart language such as “accounts for,” “smallest share,” and “the most popular dance style.” Check spelling carefully, particularly in key terms, because errors such as “privat,” “cumunity,” and “classe” distract from otherwise relevant information.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify the intended comparisons. However, control is inconsistent: several sentences lack a clear grammatical structure, as in “The pie chart demonstrates that to give the details on the site,” and “Ballet is the most common part in under 11 age group which is attend by 600 students.” Verb forms and agreement also need attention, including “which is attend” and “is atend.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries are unreliable, especially where a new sentence begins after “students” without a space or where clauses are joined with “and.” Practise writing shorter, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them accurately using clauses such as “while” or “whereas.”
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