Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the places where dance classes are held by young individuals in a town of Australia while, the bar graph shows types of dance classes by different age groups.

Overview, In pie chart the largest division is taken by 'Private studios', moreover the smallest portion is 'College-based studios'.

Private studio contains 48% of the chart, The second major portion contains school halls that is just a number below from quarter. Community halls and other are 18%. At last the smallest portion that contains the 10% of the chart.

The bar graph shows two types of groupes, firstly the under 11 and the other is 11-16. Number of students starts from 0 to 700.

Ballet is a type of dance that is mostly attend by under 11 group containing 600 number of students, furthermore there are only 300 of peoples in same class. Tap is also a kind of dance, the number of students are approximately equal of both groups, yet the first group is more then 450. The modern dance is comparativly mostly attended by the alder batch because there are more than 500 students, while the younger batch is just of 300 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios are the largest share, while college-based studios are the smallest. You also report the key age-group contrasts accurately: ballet is more popular among under-11s, modern among 11–16-year-olds, and tap figures are close. This gives the response a clear overview and relevant comparisons. To make the summary more complete, state the main bar-chart pattern in the overview rather than leaving it to the detail paragraphs, and report the school-hall and community-hall shares more precisely. The phrase “just a number below from quarter” is unclear, and the tap comparison could give both figures (about 450 and 420) to make the similarity explicit. These limitations keep some features less fully developed, despite the strong coverage of the task overall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the pie chart and bar graph. This makes the two visual elements easy to distinguish, and comparisons such as “while the younger batch is just of 300 students” help show contrast. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, with repeated sequencing phrases such as “firstly,” “furthermore,” and “At last.” Some links are also unclear: “there are only 300 of peoples in same class” does not clearly identify the age group, and “the first group” requires the reader to look back to understand the reference. Use more precise referencing and organise each chart’s figures in a consistent order to make the flow smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of chart-related vocabulary, including “largest division,” “smallest portion,” “approximately equal,” and “comparatively.” These choices help communicate proportions and differences, and the meaning is generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the largest division is taken by,” “contains a number below from quarter,” and “mostly attend by.” There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “groupes,” “comparativly,” and “alder.” Aim for standard data-reporting expressions and accurate forms; for example, describe a share as “accounts for” a percentage and say a class “is attended by” a group. This would make the vocabulary more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons with “while,” “furthermore,” and “because.” The main information is usually recoverable, but grammatical control is uneven, and errors occur in both sentence construction and punctuation. For example, “while, the bar graph shows” has an unnecessary comma, while “Private studio contains 48% of the chart, The second major portion…” joins sentences incorrectly and uses an inconsistent capital letter. In “the number of students are approximately equal,” the subject and verb do not agree. Articles and plural forms also need attention, as in “in pie chart” and “300 of peoples.” Practise building accurate comparison sentences and checking agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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