Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart below illustrates about the preference for taking dance lessons and the table shows most preferend dance type according to different age group in a particular town in Australia now-a-days.

overall, it is clearly shown that private studios are more popular place for practising dance whereas college based studios are the least favorate one. On the other hand, below 11 age group shows more interest in ballet dance form while 11-16 age group shows interent in modern form but still didnot reach the ballet's number in students interest.

As the following term, Private stodio and school halls are most popular among the other location with 48% and 24% respectivly currently. By contrast Community halls and others & college based studios are remain in least fevorate one.

In the following table, Age group of 11 shows more interest of number of students in ballet which is the highest one from other two form of dance. But Tap dance also popular in 11 year age group whereas least favorate among the 11-16 age group and shows the lowest number of students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are the smallest at 10%, and you include the 24% figure for school halls. Your overview also attempts to compare dance preferences by age. However, the age-group reporting is unclear and partly inaccurate: under-11s have the highest figure for ballet, but 11–16-year-olds have the highest figure for modern, and their ballet figure is lower than their tap figure. The response also omits the community-hall percentage and gives little numerical support for the dance-type comparisons. To make the summary more complete, report the key figures for both age groups and describe the main contrasts precisely, without adding unsupported claims about preference beyond the chart data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details about locations and dance types. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weakened by unclear references and repetitive transitions such as “As the following term” and “In the following table,” which do not clearly signal the relationship between the information. The final paragraph is especially difficult to follow because it shifts between age groups and dance forms without a clear comparison. Use one paragraph for location and another for age-group patterns, and connect each comparison directly—for example, contrast ballet figures for the two groups before discussing tap and modern. This would make the organisation more coherent and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “age group,” and “dance form,” so the topic is generally identifiable. There are also attempts to vary wording with phrases such as “more popular” and “least favourite.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning harder to interpret: “preferend,” “favorate,” “interent,” and “stodio” are examples. Several expressions are also unnatural, such as “most preferend dance type” and “shows more interest of number of students.” Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully. Phrases such as “account for,” “the most popular location,” and “the number of students taking each class” would express the data more clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “whereas” and a clause beginning “while,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement appear in examples such as “Community halls and others & college based studios are remain” and “Age group of 11 shows more interest of number of students.” The opening sentence also has an awkward construction, while missing or incorrect articles and verb forms recur. These problems sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to understand. Build reliable simple sentences first, then add one clear comparison clause at a time. For example, use a subject such as “The under-11 group” and a complete verb phrase such as “has the highest figure for ballet.” Check agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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