Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts provides key information about the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in australia are currently attending

Overall, it is clear from the graph that most of the young people attend their classes in private studios, In addition the most common type of dance class that the kids under the age of 11 go to is Ballet , whereas the ones between 11 and 16 prefers Modern

According to what is shown most of the young people chose to go to the classes that are in private studios as shown in the pie ans also some of them goes to school halls and community halls and only a small percentae take their classes in college studios

In terms of the type of classes they take it is shown that he most common type of dance class that the kids under the age of 11 go to is Ballet then comes Tap then Modern, whereas the ones between 11 and 16 chose Modern first then Tap then Ballet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main patterns accurately: private studios are the largest location category, and ballet is most popular among under-11s while modern leads for 11–16-year-olds. You also report the ranking of the three dance styles for both age groups correctly. However, the location figures are not quantified, and the comparison between age groups would be clearer with selected numbers—for example, under-11 ballet is about 600 students compared with about 300 among older students, while modern shows the reverse pattern. The overview is relevant, but the location discussion is less fully developed than the dance-type discussion. The response addresses the task, though some key features need more precise support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an overview followed by paragraphs on location and dance types, so the reader can identify the two chart topics. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited, and the same overview points are repeated in the final paragraph, particularly the rankings of ballet and modern. Linking is also basic: phrases such as “In addition” and “whereas” help show relationships, but the location paragraph mainly lists categories without a clear comparison or sequence. Improve cohesion by grouping related figures, using clear references to each age group, and avoiding repetition between the overview and body paragraphs. More deliberate paragraph development would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main chart features, with useful terms such as “most common,” “private studios,” and “whereas.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are informal or imprecise for an academic report, including “kids,” “go to,” and “chose to go to the classes.” Repetition of “most common type of dance class” also reduces flexibility. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “australia,” “ans,” and “percentae,” which detract from accuracy. Aim for concise chart language and more precise verbs, such as “attended,” “accounted for,” or “was the most popular.” This would make the report more formal and varied.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, particularly the contrast in the overview using “whereas,” and the main ideas remain understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur across the response. For example, “The charts provides” should use a plural verb, while “the ones between 11 and 16 prefers” needs a plural verb. The opening sentence lacks a full stop, and the overview contains an inappropriate capital letter after a comma. There are also awkward constructions such as “some of them goes.” Use a consistent pattern such as “students aged 11–16 prefer modern,” and check subject–verb agreement and punctuation. Greater accuracy in these basic structures would improve clarity.

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