Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are given data by using of pie chart and bar graphs depicts the data about the location of dance classes and bar chart depicts types of dance classes by different age groups.

Dance classes nowadays much populer amog the different age group learners here large group are admission in private studios and its around 48% then some one that not afforded for private that are involve in school halls after their schools are finish and its around 24%. other participations is around 18% is in community halls and other because this facility is cheaper to compare with others and here lowest is around 10% are in college based studios.

Now, numbers of student who participate in three different types of dance is 600 plus students are in ballet and decrease this ration on tap and modern its around in numbers is 450 and 300.another group of age and their age is around 11 to 16 is highly participating in modern than compare to other is 310 and 420 numbers in ballet and tap.

There are number of under age is much involve in ballet classes and age group of 11 to 16 is modern classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided charts. However, the information is often inaccurate or poorly interpreted. For example, the description of the bar chart data is confusing and does not clearly distinguish between the age groups or the dance types. The overview is missing, and the report lacks a clear summary of the main trends. The data points mentioned (e.g., '600 plus students') do not seem to align with the visual information provided. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant features—such as the most popular location or the highest participation age group—and present these clearly without attempting to list every single figure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical or misused, such as 'Now, numbers of student' and 'other participations is around 18%'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different age groups and dance types. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical flow. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') would help create a more cohesive response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey information precisely. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'there are given data by using of pie chart' and 'much populer amog'. The student struggles to use academic vocabulary appropriate for a data report. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on learning specific terminology for describing trends and proportions, such as 'the majority of', 'a significant proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable', rather than relying on basic descriptive language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other participations is'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity to demonstrate a range of structures. For example, 'there are number of under age is much involve in ballet' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of prepositions and pluralization.

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