Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided combination illustrates the details of different types of dance classes with the age and the various classes place in the contiment of Australia.

In the pie-chart, Majority of the total population was going to the private studios were 48%. However ratio of 24% were want to go in the private school hall after the completion of the academic, while one-fourth part of Australian citizen was coming to college based studios and community halls or others is 10 and 18% respectively.

On the plotted bar graph, On the age of under 11. 300 students were willing to go in the modern class, although double of the people was come to ballet were 600 learners. at the age between 11-16, prefer to take ballet dance is 600 altermatly one-third portion is excitment to attained the tap classes was 400 respectively.

Overall, youth are persuved to ballet dance types mostly and elder age are willing to modern classes with the private ameneties prefers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying key data points such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies in data interpretation (e.g., stating 'one-fourth' for college-based studios when the chart shows 10%). The overview is present but lacks clarity, as the summary of trends is slightly confusing and does not fully capture the relationship between the two charts. To improve, ensure data is transcribed accurately and focus on highlighting the most significant comparisons rather than listing individual figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'On the plotted bar graph, On the age of under 11'. The logical progression between sentences is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors, making some parts of the report difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'contiment' (continent), 'excitment to attained', and 'persuved'. These errors occasionally impede the flow of the text. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic descriptors. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing data trends, such as 'proportion', 'predominant', or 'fluctuate', and ensure correct spelling of key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Majority... was going', 'one-third portion is excitment'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. While the meaning is generally understandable, the errors are persistent and affect the overall readability. The range of sentence structures is limited, with many sentences being simple or poorly constructed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and article usage.

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