Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This report summarises information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Incorporating all the location of dance classes in the town

48% are private studios which covers the majority of dance class locations. School halls(after-school) also cover a 24% graph of dance locations , community halls & other at 18% and , college-based studios at 10%.

The data of types of dance classes attended by the age group was also recorded including the number of students. The ballet classes is being attended by 300 students between the age 11-16 and 600 students under the age 11. Tap dance attended by approximate [redacted phone] students between the age of 11-16 and almost 450 students under the age 11.

The modern dance comprised of [redacted phone] students in the age group of 11-16 and exact 300 students under the age group of 11.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers both charts, but the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or synthesis of the data. While you identify key figures, such as the 48% for private studios and the student numbers for dance types, you do not effectively compare the trends between the two age groups. For instance, noting that modern dance is more popular among the 11-16 age group while ballet is more popular among those under 11 would have provided a stronger analytical focus. The report reads more like a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between the two charts is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited. Phrases like 'Incorporating all the location' are awkward and do not serve as effective signposting. The sentences within the paragraphs are somewhat disjointed, and the lack of linking words makes the text feel like a series of isolated observations rather than a flowing report. Improving the use of transition signals (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Regarding the distribution') would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on repetitive phrasing such as 'attended by' and 'age group'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'cover a 24% graph of dance locations', which is not standard academic English. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied reporting verbs and nouns to describe the data, such as 'account for', 'represent', 'the majority of', or 'a significant proportion'. The current range is sufficient to convey the basic information but does not demonstrate flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'The ballet classes is being attended' contains a subject-verb agreement error, and 'The modern dance comprised of' is grammatically incorrect (it should be 'comprised' or 'consisted of'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.

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