Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The charts illustrate the percentages of dance classes in different locations and how many number of young students in each sector ongoing in a town in Australia country.
Overall, most of students are attended to Ballet type dance and modern dance was participated by minimum students. Half of the students intrested in joining in the private studios location. College based studios are least in count.
The pie chart represents location of dance classes with ratios. Private studios location was most significant nearly half of the portion with 48% and students attanding in school halls is approxmately one-fourth of the total. 10% of people are joined college-based studio area while remaining childerns are joined in community halls and other areas.
The bar graph gives information about the number of students joined in different types of classes by their age groups. Ballet is highest number of students participated with total 900 students by sumup of 300 students under 11 years old and 600 students between 11 to 16 years approxmatly. Modern dance type with 820 count. Tap type with 850 people nearly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, including the distribution of locations and the number of students per dance type. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify that private studios are the most popular and ballet has the highest participation, the comparison between age groups in the bar chart is slightly inaccurate (e.g., stating 900 for ballet by summing 300 and 600, which is correct, but the description of the other dance types lacks precision). To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the specific categories and avoid vague phrasing like 'remaining childerns'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'The pie chart represents', 'The bar graph gives information'). Some transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the age groups and the total numbers could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'joined', 'count', and 'type'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'intrested', 'attanding', 'approxmately', and 'childerns', which detract from the overall quality. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'category', 'participation rates', and 'predominant'. The range is sufficient to convey the message, but the frequent spelling mistakes limit the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'most of students are attended to', 'how many number of young students', and 'Modern dance type with 820 count'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally impede the clarity of the information. While the meaning is generally understood, the lack of control over basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction prevents a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would be highly beneficial.
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