Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram illustrates the way in which water moves in a natural cycle.
Overall, it is a natural process. The process consists of several steps of the natural water cycle beginning with the condensation of water and ending with the evaporation of water and it makes clouds.
To begin with, it is cycle, thus for understanding we can start from anywhere. First and foremost, the condensation of water and it can cause a large amount of water is soaked into a soil and the remaining water is runoff into streams. Subsequently, once soil absorb water then it increases level of groundwater which is necessary for rainfall.
In addition, high ground water flow toward the stream and also it increases volume of stream or river. After that, when sun reflects on stream then the process of evaporation starts. In this stage, because of evaporation clouds are filled of water and once it has been filled with full of water then rainfall and the condensation process begins. This process continuously moves water in nature.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to address the task entirely. The prompt asks for a summary of charts regarding dance classes for young people in Australia, but the student has written a description of the water cycle. Because the content is completely irrelevant to the provided visual data, it cannot be evaluated against the task requirements. In an actual IELTS examination, this would be treated as a memorized or off-topic response, resulting in a very low score for Task Achievement as the prompt was ignored.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs with some attempt at logical sequencing using transition words like 'To begin with', 'Subsequently', and 'In addition'. However, the internal logic is flawed because the content does not match the prompt. While the paragraphing is present, the lack of relevance to the task makes the overall coherence ineffective. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive, which limits the flow of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Words such as 'process', 'water', and 'natural' are used frequently. There is little attempt to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary, which is expected for an Academic Task 1 response. While the language is sufficient to describe the water cycle, it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. Errors in collocation, such as 'filled of water' instead of 'filled with water', are also present.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'it is cycle' (missing article), 'the remaining water is runoff' (incorrect verb form), and 'once soil absorb water' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is generally functional, but the grammatical inaccuracies are consistent throughout the text, which hinders the clarity of the writing.
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