Band 8.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 8.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 8.0)

The given mixed charts illustrate the locations and types of dance classes attended by young people in a town in Australia.

Overall, it is clear that private studios were the most popular dance classes for young people, while college-based studios accounted for the smallest percentage.

A significant proportion (48%) of young people participated in dance classes in private studios, whereas 24% of young people opted for school halls after school. Moreover, 18% of young people attended classes in community halls & other venues. The lowest share (10%) was represented in college-based studios.

Ballet was the most popular dance type among young people aged under 11, with 600 students, whereas it was least popular among those aged 11-16, with 300 students. Furthermore, 450 students aged under 11 and 400 students aged from 11-16 were enrolled in tap dance classes. 510 participants aged 11-16 took modern dance classes, and 300 students aged under 11 chose this dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by summarizing the two charts. You have identified the key features, such as the popularity of private studios and the variations in dance types across age groups. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main trends. However, the report could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two charts or within the data sets, rather than just listing the figures. For example, noting that modern dance is the only category where the older age group outnumbers the younger one would have added analytical depth. Overall, the information is accurate and well-selected.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 8.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two charts. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You have used cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'moreover', and 'furthermore' to link your sentences effectively. The paragraphing is appropriate, separating the location data from the dance type data. To reach a higher band, ensure that the transition between the two paragraphs is slightly smoother, perhaps by explicitly stating that the second chart provides a breakdown by age and dance type.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Terms like 'significant proportion', 'opted for', and 'enrolled in' are used accurately. There is some repetition of 'young people' and 'students', which could be varied with synonyms like 'adolescents', 'participants', or 'youths'. The vocabulary is generally precise and appropriate for an academic report. While there are no major errors, incorporating a few more sophisticated collocations or topic-specific terms would enhance the lexical range further.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 8.0

The response demonstrates a good control of grammatical structures. You have used a mix of simple and complex sentences effectively, such as the use of 'whereas' to contrast data points. Punctuation is generally accurate, and the sentences are clear and easy to read. There are no significant grammatical errors that impede communication. To improve, you could experiment with more varied sentence structures, such as using passive voice or participial phrases to describe the data, which would demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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