Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts provides information about the location and types of dance classes attended by young people in Australia.

The location of dance classes in this pie charts 48% dance classes happened in private studios and this is the highest percentage of location than others location. the less percentage of the location of dance classes are college-based studios and this is 10%. other two locations are community halls and others and school halls these two location are 18% and 24% .

the graph present ballet which type is used most in dance class over 600 students under 11 addend this class and 11-16 years old under 300 students attend this class. the the second category is Tap where around [redacted phone] students was attend this type of class and they were under 11 and 11-16. the last but not the list modern dance class 300 students was under 11 years old and over 500 student was 11-16 years old.

overall, most of the students location was private studios and under 11 years old students attend ballet class than others types .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying the most popular location and the trends in dance class attendance. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, the description of the bar chart is confusing, as it lists numbers that do not clearly align with the visual data provided. While the overview is present, it lacks the necessary analytical depth to reach a higher band. The response would benefit from a more precise selection of data points and a clearer comparison between the two age groups to better highlight the differences in preferences.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is limited, relying heavily on simple structures like 'the second category is' or 'the last but not the list'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the two charts is abrupt. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, ensuring that the progression of information feels logical rather than just a list of observations.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases such as 'the less percentage' and 'this is the highest percentage' are functional but lack the precision expected at higher levels. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'addend' instead of 'attended' and 'the last but not the list' instead of 'the last but not least'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied terminology for describing trends, such as 'predominant', 'account for', or 'a significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies primarily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts provides', 'the graph present') and awkward phrasing ('most of the students location was'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and incorrect spacing. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors will significantly improve your score.

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