Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie chart and bar chart illustrate the various locations and variety of dance classes in rural area of Australia and currently pursuing by adolescent and young-child.
Overall, it be said that youth have shown more interest in modern dance as compare to other dances and kids have given more preference to ballet dance.
To begin with, Private studios have covered 48% of rural area in Australia for dance classes and least area covered by college-based studios around 10%. Moreover, 24% of dance location is managed by schools halls and other 18% is take care by community hall and other.
On the other hand, Ballet and modern dances has highest students around 600 both for grown-up and youth and also they stands lowest around 300. Additionally, Tap dance remain constant around 450 student among other two dances.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main features of the charts, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have included some data points, but the comparison between the two charts is limited. To improve, ensure you provide a more detailed overview and support your points with more precise data. The under-length nature of the response means that some parts of the task are not fully developed, preventing a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You have used some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the description of the data is confusing. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'currently pursuing by adolescent' and 'take care by community hall'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with accurate collocations. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'represented', or 'fluctuated', and work on using more natural word combinations to express your ideas clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Ballet and modern dances has', 'they stands') and passive voice construction ('is take care by'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally impede the flow of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct formation of passive voice, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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