Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This pie chart illustrates the location of Australia where different group divided and showing level of attendance further the diagram explaining about the age of students who joined the dance classes in different three area of Australia.

First, if we look at the pie chart where four location are pointed like community hall, private studios, school hall and college-based studios. In community halls and other students contribution is 18% then in the school there dance class placed after school and 24% students attempted this class.

Furthermore, in college-based studios only 10% students were present but in private-based studio they pointed 48% students for dance class.

secondly, Different age of group students are joining different three kind of dance classes that is Ballet, Tap and Modern.

If we are calculate students of ballet class then here 600 students are under 11 and 300 students are in 11 to 16 age group.

However, in Tap class approximately 450 students attempting whose age is under 11 and 420 are from age group of 11-16.

In Modern class students are 300 whose attempting classes and 510 students are from age group of 11-16.

In all that end we noticed that location of private studios have extended number of students like 48% and collage-based studios are 10% that is very lowest compared to others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by summarizing the two charts. However, the overview is weak; it merely describes the charts rather than highlighting the most significant trends, such as the dominance of private studios or the age-related shifts in dance styles. While key features are identified, the reporting is inconsistent. For example, the description of the pie chart is somewhat confusing, and the comparison between the age groups in the bar chart is purely list-like. To improve, ensure you synthesize the data to show clear trends rather than just listing figures. The response covers all parts of the prompt, but the lack of a clear, analytical overview limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In all that end' or 'if we are calculate'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly when moving between the two charts. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which data point is being discussed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically from the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning but lacks the precision and variety expected for higher bands. There is frequent repetition of words like 'students', 'class', and 'age'. Some word choices are unnatural or incorrect, such as 'pointed' instead of 'indicated' or 'attempted' instead of 'attended'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated collocations. To improve, focus on using more varied synonyms and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'trend', and 'fluctuation'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'where four location are pointed' (subject-verb agreement) and 'that is very lowest' (superlative error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are frequent errors in verb tense and article usage. The frequency of these errors occasionally hinders the flow of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms is essential.

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