Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The Community halls and others have 18% of relavant chances for dance location because that is not suitable for dance in the community halls, community halls are for people who come to spend time with their frnds and family with a relevant talks so that place is not suitable for dance classes.
Schools halls has 24% chances in chart, some schools on India give proper classes to students for dance but it's not relevant everywhere in the world. Not just India there are many countries who offers dance classes to students as its their basic culture.
College based studios has 10℅ because college students are in growing phase and they have other alot of things to learn so there are not any time for students to take dance classes, but yes many students who are interested in dance they must take out time for it.
So the last one is private Studios which has 48% pf chances in the picture because studios are a relevant place for proper dance practice and classes. We can book our classes in studios and do practice there and take classes from dance masters etc and there should not be any time issues because they have there own timings for classes so we can easily manage our time accordingly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of objectively summarising the data provided in the charts, you have included personal opinions and irrelevant external information (e.g., discussing dance classes in India). An IELTS report must remain neutral and focus exclusively on the data presented. You have identified the percentages for the locations, but the analysis is subjective and speculative rather than analytical. To improve, you must describe the data trends, compare the categories, and avoid adding your own commentary or outside knowledge about why these trends exist.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is not logical for a data report. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'so', 'because'). There is a lack of clear referencing to the data, and the transition between sentences feels disjointed. To improve, use linking words to compare the data points (e.g., 'In contrast', 'While', 'Furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a clear aspect of the information provided in the charts rather than personal narrative.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and often inappropriate for an academic context. Phrases like 'relevant chances' and 'dance masters' are used incorrectly or sound unnatural. There is also a reliance on informal language and repetitive phrasing. To achieve a higher score, you need to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'accounted for', 'the majority', and 'significant'. Avoid informal conversational fillers and focus on using academic collocations to describe the statistics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Schools halls has'), incorrect pluralisation, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'there are not any time'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in basic punctuation and word order. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and using a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for describing data.
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