Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The pie chart illustrates the proportions of students at four locations who participated in the dance classes namely community halls, school halls, college-based studios, and private studios. While, the bar chart provides the information about number of students who participated in three types of dance classes such as Ballet, Tap, and Modern, by two age groups.
Overall, in the pie chart, private studios constituted the largest proportion followed by those who participated in dance classes at school hall. In contrast, college-based studios accounted for the smallest proportions. Regarding the bar chart, students aged under 11 highly participated in Ballet dance classes compared to aged between 11 and 16 who joined modern dance classes. In tap dance class, both age groups moderately performed.
In detail, in terms of pie chart, students in the private studios participated significantly at 48% compared with students at college who made up 10%. Students in the community halls and school halls moderately participated at 18% and 24% respectively.
Regarding the bar chart, students aged under 11 significantly joined Ballet dance class to about 600 numbers compared to aged between 11 and 16 who participated in modern dance class to about 530 numbers. In the least participated dance classes, aged 11-16 had less interest in Ballet to about 300 number and aged under 11 were least interested in modern dance class to about 300. In Tap dance class, both group moderately participated to about 400 by aged 11-16 and 430 numbers by aged under 11.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The response successfully addresses all parts of the task. You have identified the main features of both the pie chart and the bar chart and provided relevant comparisons. The overview is clear and highlights the most significant trends, such as the dominance of private studios and the age-related preferences in dance styles. However, the description of the data could be more precise; for instance, stating '600 numbers' is slightly awkward, and the comparison of 'moderately performed' is vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are integrated more smoothly into the analysis rather than just listing them. Overall, you have provided a solid summary of the information presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Regarding', and 'In detail' to guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the data. The referencing is generally clear, though some sentences are slightly repetitive in their structure. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring a smoother flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'constituted', 'proportions', and 'significantly'. There are some instances of slightly unnatural word choices, such as 'highly participated' instead of 'showed a high level of participation' or '600 numbers' instead of 'a figure of 600'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your report. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and varying your verbs to describe trends, rather than relying on 'participated' repeatedly throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'the bar chart provides the information about number of students' (missing 'the') and 'by aged 11-16' (incorrect preposition usage). Additionally, some phrasing is slightly awkward, such as 'students... participated significantly at 48%'. Despite these errors, your meaning is always clear, and the mistakes do not significantly impede understanding. To achieve a higher score, work on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions in statistical descriptions.
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