Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given chart illustrates the the information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
In this time there are many location and types of dance classes and in many area where young people are attending dance classes in large amount for a different reasions like prepare for performance on stage for any international day, for on any festival or for a special day.
Going into depth out of all the highest amount of peoples who take dance classes are notice in private studios which is 48% and the second highest amount of peoples take dance classes are noticed in school halls (after-school) which is 24% and the lowest amount of peoples take dance classes were noticed in college-based studios which is 10% and at last the average amount of people take dance classes were noticed in community halls & other sector which is 18% which is the average amount of peoples who take dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by reporting the main features of the charts. However, it fails to include any information regarding the 'types' of dance classes, focusing exclusively on the 'location' data. This is a significant omission. Furthermore, the second paragraph introduces speculative information about reasons for attending dance classes (e.g., 'international day', 'festival') which is not present in the provided charts. This is an inappropriate use of external knowledge. To improve, ensure you only report data provided in the prompt and cover all categories shown in the visuals.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical. Phrases like 'the highest amount of peoples' and 'the second highest amount of peoples' are used repeatedly, which makes the flow feel clunky. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To reach a higher band, use a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. The phrase 'amount of peoples' is used incorrectly throughout the text; 'number of people' would be the correct collocation. There is also a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language. The word 'noticed' is used repeatedly to describe the data, which is not the most precise choice for interpreting charts. To improve, incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'account for', 'constitute', 'predominate', or 'a significant proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'the the information', 'In this time', 'many area', and 'different reasions'. The sentence structures are largely simple or repetitive, and there are issues with subject-verb agreement and pluralisation (e.g., 'peoples'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and spelling hinders the overall quality of the writing. Focusing on proofreading for basic errors and attempting more complex sentence structures would help improve this score.
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