Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
This chart illustrates the locality and generals of dance classes the youths in a town in Australia are currently participating.
As shown in the graph, a large percentage of people attend dance classes in private studios, while less people go the college-based studios for dance classes. Ballet is popular among children while teenagers are more welcoming with modern dances.
The previous graph reveals the choose of location when it comes to dance classes, the majority of people-48%-choose to take dance classes in private studios, likely because of the numerous numbers of private studios in the block. The other 52% of people choose to take classes in either community halls, school halls, or college-based studios.
The chart below organizes the categories of dance classes people are taking divided by age groups. The population that are taking tap classes is assumably the same between children under 11 and teenagers that are 11 to 16 years old, more than 400 people of each age group are participating in the classes. Ballet is more popular between children under 11, up to 600 children are taking ballet classes. Meanwhile, modern dances are welcomed by teenagers between 11-16, 500 and more teens are taking modern dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
该回答涵盖了图表的主要特征，识别出了关键趋势，例如私人工作室的受欢迎程度以及不同年龄段对舞蹈风格的偏好。然而，分析略显肤浅。例如，文中提到 52% 的人选择了其他地点，这是一个基于所提供数据的计算错误（图表显示 48% 的人选择私人工作室，这意味着 52% 是剩余部分，但图表中并未明确将其他地点的比例相加得出 52%）。此外，对舞蹈类型的描述缺乏精确的比较语言。为了达到更高的分数，请确保所有数据点解读准确，并更明确地突出类别之间的比较。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
文章被组织成逻辑分明的段落，包括引言、地点总结和舞蹈类型总结。文中使用了衔接词，如 'As shown in the graph', 'The previous graph reveals', 和 'Meanwhile'。然而，一些过渡显得有些机械或重复。指代关系总体清晰，但句子间的流畅度可以通过使用更多样化的连接词来连接数据点，从而得到改善。分段是合理的，但段落内部结构可以更紧凑，以确保观点的推进更加连贯。
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
词汇量对于该任务来说尚可，但缺乏更高分数所要求的精确度和广度。像 'generals of dance classes' 和 'more welcoming with modern dances' 这样的短语显得不自然且不精确。此外，文中还存在对 'people' 和 'classes' 等基础词汇的重复使用。虽然你成功使用了 'participating' 和 'illustrates' 等词汇，但整体词汇范围有限。为了提高，请专注于使用更具学术性的搭配以及与数据描述相关的精确术语，例如 'the majority of respondents' 或 'a significant proportion'。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
文中混合使用了简单句和复杂句。存在一些语法错误，例如 'less people go the college-based studios'（应为 'fewer people go to'）、'the choose of location'（应为 'the choice of location'）以及 'the population that are taking'（应为 'the population that is taking'）。虽然这些错误不会阻碍理解，但出现的频率足以影响得分。你应该重点关注主谓一致以及名词与动词的正确用法（例如 'choose' 与 'choice'）。
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