Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the place and location of the dance classes of youth in a town of Australia who are currently attending.
Overall, private studios are the first priority for dancers and college studios are the least priority while community halls and school halls are common locations for dancers. Whereas Ballet dance has maximum under 11 students and modern dance has more students of under 16 and ballet dance has least strength of under 16 students.
Private studios are on the top list having 48% and school halls have 24% while, community halls has 18% third on the list. College studios are the last choice with 10%. Ballet dance has the most favoured with those aged 11 having 600 dancers and 300 students of under 16. The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students of under 11 and 410 students of under 16 and the last is modern dance having least popular under 11 dancers with the quantity of 300 but, it is the top priority for under 16 students with the strength of 500 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the response lacks precision in reporting data. For instance, you mention '600 dancers' for Ballet, but the chart units are not specified as raw numbers, and your interpretation of the data is occasionally confusing. The overview is present but could be more clearly separated from the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure you accurately describe the data points and avoid making generalisations that are not fully supported by the provided visual information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'whereas', 'while', and 'on the top list'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing, such as in the second paragraph where the comparison of dance styles becomes difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly would enhance the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, using terms like 'priority', 'favoured', and 'quantity'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'least strength of under 16 students' and 'the last is modern dance having least popular under 11 dancers'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and precise terminology for describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the place and location', 'the last choice') and prepositions. Some sentences are also structurally awkward, such as 'The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the accuracy of your writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent sentence construction will help improve your score.
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