Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the place and location of the dance classes of youth in a town of Australia who are currently attending.
Overall, private studios are the first priority for dancers and college studios are the least priority while community halls and school halls are common locations for dancers. Whereas Ballet dance has maximum number of under 11 students and modern dance has more students of under 16 and ballet dance has the least strength of under 16 students.
Private studios are on the top list having 48% and school halls have 24% while, community halls have 18% third on the list. College studios are the last choice with 10%. Ballet dance has the most favoured with those aged 11 having 600 dancers and 300 students of under 16. The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students of under 11 and 410 students of under 16 and the last is modern dance having least popular under 11 dancers with the quantity of 300 but it is the top priority for under 16 students with the strength of 500 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both charts. You have successfully selected and reported key data points, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the analysis is slightly hindered by some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention 'Ballet dance has the most favoured with those aged 11', but the chart refers to 'under 11'. Additionally, the phrasing 'least strength of under 16 students' is slightly confusing. To reach a higher band, ensure that data is described with greater precision and that comparisons are more clearly linked to the specific categories provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the specific data. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and' to connect clauses. Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the transition between the location data and the dance type data could be better signposted to help the reader follow the shift in focus. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main points clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'studios', 'community halls', and 'dance classes'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are instances of awkward word choices, such as 'least strength' instead of 'lowest number' or 'smallest proportion'. There is also a minor issue with word formation and collocation, such as 'the place and location', which is redundant. To improve, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary to describe trends and proportions, such as 'predominant', 'account for', or 'a significant minority'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'Ballet dance has the most favoured' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'Ballet is the most favoured'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrasing, such as 'in a town of Australia' (should be 'in an Australian town'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and refining sentence construction will help improve your accuracy.
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