Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the place and location of the dance classes of youth in a town of Australia who are currently attending.
Overall, private studios are the first priority for dancers and college studios are the least priority while community halls and school halls are common locations for dancers. Whereas Ballet dance has the maximum under 11 students and modern dance has more students of under 16 and ballet dance has least strength of under 16 students.
Private studios are on the top list having 48% and school halls have 24% while community halls has 18% third on the list. College studios are the last choice with 10%. Ballet dance has the most favoured with those aged 11 having 600 dancers and 300 students of under 16. The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students of under 11 and 410 students of under 16 and the last is modern dance having least popular under 11 dancers with the quantity of 300 but, it is the top priority for under 16 students with the strength of 500 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both charts. You successfully highlight the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While you mention some figures, the comparison between the two charts could be more integrated. The description of the data is generally accurate, but some phrasing, such as 'least strength of under 16 students', is slightly awkward and could be more precise to better reflect the data presented in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on the two distinct charts. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'Whereas', and 'while', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the location data and the dance style data is abrupt. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the structure of the second body paragraph is somewhat repetitive, relying heavily on listing figures rather than creating a cohesive narrative of the trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'priority', 'favoured', and 'quantity'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'least strength of under 16 students' and 'the other type of dance in tap dance having'. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the score. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied and precise vocabulary to describe trends and proportions, moving beyond basic descriptors like 'top list' or 'last choice'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the place and location of the dance classes of youth' (redundant) and 'modern dance has more students of under 16' (missing articles or prepositions). Subject-verb agreement is occasionally inconsistent, for example, 'community halls has 18%'. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure in the final paragraph is somewhat run-on, which affects the overall fluency. Increasing the variety of complex structures while reducing minor errors would improve the score.
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