Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the place and location of the dance classes of youth in a town of Australia who are currently attending.
Overall, private studios are the first priority for dancers and college studios are the least priority while community halls and school halls are common locations for dancers. Whereas Ballet dance has the maximum under 11 students and modern dance has more students of under 16 and ballet dance has the least strength of under 16 students.
Private studios are on the top list having 48% and school halls have 24% while community halls have 18% third on the list. College studios are the last choice with 10%. Ballet dance is the most favoured with those aged 11 having 600 dancers and 300 students of under 16. The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students of under 11 and 410 students of under 16 and the last is modern dance having least popular under 11 dancers with the quantity of 300 but, it is the top priority for under 16 students with the strength of 500 students
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both charts. You have successfully selected key data points, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the analysis could be improved by better integrating the comparisons. For instance, while you mention the percentages for locations, the connection between the age groups and the dance types is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview clearly synthesises the information rather than just listing facts. The data is generally accurate, but ensure that the distinction between the two charts is consistently clear throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organised into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall', 'whereas', and 'while', to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal structure of the second body paragraph could be improved by using more varied linking words to connect the data points for the different dance styles. Referencing is generally clear, but ensure that pronouns or cohesive markers are used more effectively to avoid repetitive sentence structures.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'favoured', 'priority', and 'strength'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'least strength' and 'quantity of', which are not the most natural collocations in this context. While you successfully convey the information, the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'account for', or 'a significant proportion', to enhance the sophistication of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the place and location of the dance classes of youth' (redundant) and 'the other type of dance in tap dance having' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some missing commas that would help clarify the structure of your sentences. To achieve a higher score, focus on reducing these minor errors and increasing the variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or passive voice more effectively.
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