Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the place and location of the dance classes of youth in a town of Australia who are currently attending.
Overall, private studios are the first priority for dancers and college studios are the least popular while community halls and school halls are common locations for dancers. Whereas Ballet dance has the maximum under 11 students and modern dance has more students of under 16 and ballet dance has the least strength of under 16 students.
Private studios are on the top list having 48% and school halls have 24% while community halls have 18% third on the list. College studios are the last choice with 10%. Ballet dance is the most favoured with those aged 11 having 600 dancers and 300 students of under 16. The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students of under 11 and 410 students of under 16 and the last is modern dance having the least popular under 11 dancers with the quantity of 300 but, it is the top priority for under 16 students with the strength of 500 students
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both charts. You have successfully selected key data points, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures without fully synthesizing the information. For instance, while you mention the percentages for locations, the comparison between the two charts could be more integrated. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing facts. The data is generally accurate, but the presentation lacks a cohesive analytical narrative.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'and' and 'while'. Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, particularly in the second paragraph. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, such as 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', or 'Conversely', which would help the reader follow your argument more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'priority', 'favoured', and 'quantity'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'least strength' is not a natural way to describe the lowest number of students, and 'place and location' is redundant. The phrasing 'on the top list' is also slightly informal. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary, such as 'prevalent', 'proportion', or 'minority', and ensure that your collocations are natural for describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students', which lacks a main verb. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'in a town of Australia' instead of 'in an Australian town'. Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are run-on or lack necessary commas to separate clauses. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and refining complex sentence construction will help improve your score.
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