Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the distribution of the dance classes of youth in a town of Australia who are currently attending.
Overall, private studios are the first priority for dancers and college studios are the least popular while community halls and school halls are common locations for dancers. Whereas Ballet dance has the maximum under 11 students and modern dance has more students of under 16 and ballet dance has the least strength of under 16 students.
Private studios are on the top list having 48% and school halls have 24% while community halls have 18% third on the list. College studios are the last choice with 10%. Ballet dance is the most favoured with those aged 11 having 600 dancers and 300 students of under 16. The other type of dance in tap dance having 450 students of under 11 and 410 students of under 16 and the last is modern dance having the least popular under 11 dancers with the quantity of 300 but, it is the top priority for under 16 students with the strength of 500 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response successfully identifies the main features of the charts, including the location distribution and the age-related preferences for dance types. You have provided clear comparisons, such as contrasting the popularity of modern dance between the two age groups. However, the report could be improved by ensuring the data is presented more accurately; for instance, the description of ballet as having the 'least strength' for under 16s is slightly confusing, and the phrasing 'maximum under 11 students' is a bit awkward. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the specific categories provided in the prompt without ambiguity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is clear, moving from general trends to specific data points. You use some cohesive devices like 'whereas' and 'while' to link ideas. However, the transition between the location data and the dance type data is somewhat abrupt. The use of referencing could be more precise; for example, in the second paragraph, the phrase 'the other type of dance' is slightly vague. Improving the variety of linking words would help the flow feel more natural and less mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, including terms like 'distribution', 'favoured', and 'priority'. However, there are some instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'least strength' and 'top list', which are not standard collocations in this context. Additionally, the repetition of 'students' and 'dancers' limits the lexical variety. To improve, try to use more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'proportion', 'predominant', or 'the majority of participants', to describe the data more professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'the distribution of the dance classes of youth' (which is slightly awkward) and 'the other type of dance in tap dance having' (which lacks a main verb). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are slightly run-on. To achieve a higher score, focus on reducing these minor errors and incorporating a wider variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, to improve the sophistication of your writing.
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