Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is a very good habit to dance , this keeps the body active and healthy and my personal thinking is that one should know every possible type of dancing and majority location for dance studio is private studio that requires money so I think that young people should have dance class in there Schools and college so that they can learn dance without giving much money and it will be very convenient for them and ballet dance is very popular among teens and children as well as modern dance , 500 people are fond of modern dance in this time and it is really impressive, I think dancing is the most reliable source for energy consumption and staying fit and healthy and every age group must do some activities like dancing that keeps them healthy and not only phisical activity it also keeps mental activities smooth and happy , than you
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to address the task requirements. Instead of summarizing the provided charts regarding the location and types of dance classes, the student provides a personal opinion essay about the benefits of dancing and suggests that schools should offer dance classes. There is no attempt to report the main features of the data or make comparisons between the categories shown in the charts. Consequently, the response is off-topic and does not fulfill the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report, which necessitates an objective summary of visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is written as a single, long, run-on sentence without paragraphing or logical structure. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of thought is disjointed. The text reads more like a stream-of-consciousness personal opinion than a structured report. Because the content is not organized into a clear introduction, body, or conclusion, and lacks logical flow, it is difficult to follow the writer's intent.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic, informal language such as 'very good habit', 'my personal thinking', and 'really impressive'. There is no attempt to use academic or data-related vocabulary (e.g., 'proportion', 'significant', 'majority', 'trend'). The phrasing is conversational and inappropriate for an academic report. The spelling of 'phisical' is incorrect, and the overall lexical range is insufficient to convey complex information or describe data accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response consists of a single, poorly punctuated sentence that lacks grammatical control. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and a lack of proper clause subordination. Basic errors in grammar, such as 'without giving much money' (instead of 'spending') and 'in this time', are frequent. The lack of sentence variety and the persistent errors in punctuation and syntax make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a very limited command of English grammar.
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