Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.5)
The given pie chart and table illustrate the information on the location of dance classes in a town in Australia attended by young people, and the breakdown of types of dance forms practiced.
Overall, it can be observed that most of the youth prefer dedicating their time to going to private studios rather than public classes. Furthermore, it is clear that ballet is the most popular dance form throughout the period. Meanwhile, tap is attended by all age groups.
In detail, private studios witness the most attendance with approximately 48% of the total. Meanwhile, less than one-third of children, around 24% prefer to attend dance classes in their own school halls after school hours. In stark contrast, college-based studios are the least popular and only around 10% of children tend to attend. In addition, publicly available community halls have only 18% attendance in total, marking the second lowest location in Australia.
Delving deeper, ballet has the most significant growth in attendance, almost 600 students under the age of 11, which is double the number of children in the age group of 11-16. Furthermore, the modern dance form is enjoyed the most by 11-16 year-olds with 520 participants, and 300 under the age group of 11. On the other hand, every age group of children loves to participate in tap, with an average of 400 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.5 |
| Overall | 7.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response effectively identifies the main features of the charts. You have successfully highlighted the most popular locations and dance forms, and included relevant comparisons, such as contrasting private studios with college-based studios. However, the analysis of the table data is slightly flawed; you mention 'significant growth' in attendance for ballet, but the chart provides a snapshot of current attendance, not a trend over time. Additionally, the statement that tap is attended by 'all age groups' is a slight over-generalization as the data only covers two specific age brackets. To reach a higher band, ensure your interpretation of the data remains strictly factual and avoids implying temporal changes where none are shown.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that group information by location and dance type. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In stark contrast', and 'Delving deeper' are used effectively to guide the reader through the data. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two distinct charts. The progression of ideas is clear, and the information flows well from one point to the next. The use of referencing is generally accurate, though some transitions could be slightly more varied to avoid a mechanical feel.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information with precision, using terms like 'breakdown', 'witness', and 'participants'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, which is generally successful. However, there are minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'most significant growth' (when the data is static) and 'loves to participate', which is slightly informal for an academic report. To improve, focus on using more neutral, academic descriptors for data interpretation rather than emotive language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.5
The response displays a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are error-free, and the punctuation is generally accurate. You have used complex structures effectively, such as 'while less than one-third of children... prefer to attend'. There are occasional minor slips, such as the phrasing 'the age group of 11-16' which could be more concisely expressed. Overall, your control of grammar is strong, and the errors present do not impede communication or cause any confusion for the reader.
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