Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The pie chart shows data on the location of dance classes in which youths in in a particular town in Australia attend lately and the bar chart illustrate the type of dance lessons according to age group.
Overall, private studios are the most used spaces for dance classes, in contrast, college-based studios are the least used. According to the bar chart, children under 11 years participated in ballet classes the most, while those from age 11-16 engaged more in modern dance classes.
In the pie chart, private studios accounted for 48% usage for dance classes. School halls were used after school which recorded 24%, followed by community halls and others which accounted for 18%. College-based studios were the least location that was used for dance lessons which showed 10%.
As seen in the bar chart, kids under the age of 11 participated the most in ballet dance classes recording 600 members, in contrast, those under age 11-16 accounted for 300 members in ballet classes. Tap dance classes recorded 450 students under age 11, while 420 students participated the tap dances in between age 11-16. Finally, the modern dance classes was filled with 520 students from age 11-16, whereas, only 300 learners under the age of 11 attended this class.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response effectively covers all parts of the task. You have successfully identified the main features of both the pie chart and the bar chart, providing a clear overview and supporting details with relevant data. The comparison between age groups and dance types is well-executed. To reach a higher band, ensure that you avoid minor inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, you mentioned 'college-based studios' as the least used, which is correct, but ensure that all comparisons are precise. The summary is well-structured and addresses the prompt requirements comprehensively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the distinct charts. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'while', and 'whereas' to link ideas effectively. However, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking phrases to avoid repetitive structures. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and the overall structure supports the reader's understanding of the data presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'accounted for', 'engaged', and 'participated'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the least location that was used' (which is slightly awkward) and 'filled with' (which is informal for a data report). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to trends and data analysis. The spelling is generally accurate, and the vocabulary used is sufficient to convey the intended meaning clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'youths in in a particular town' (repetition), 'the bar chart illustrate' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'the modern dance classes was filled' (subject-verb agreement). Additionally, 'in between age 11-16' is slightly unidiomatic. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score in this criterion.
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