Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart depicts the location and various types of dance classes for youngsters in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Overall , private studios and ballet age group under 11 has the highest percentage in both location and dance type . On the other hand , college -based studios and ballet age group between 11-16 has the lowest percentage.
To begin with, private studios has the highest percentage of 48% in location, while college -based studios has the lowest of 10% . Community hails and other , school halls has 18% and 24% respectively.
Furthermore, ballet dance age group under 11 has the highest value of 600 but on the same hand age between 11-16 has the lowest value along with modern age group under 11 of 300. Modern style dance has the second highest value of approximately 520 . Moreover, Tap dance age group under 11 has value around 430 and same age group between 11-15 has value approximately 410.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends such as the popularity of private studios and the variations in dance styles. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the comparison of dance types is confusing, as you mix absolute numbers (600) with percentages without clear distinction. Additionally, there are inaccuracies in the data reporting, such as stating 'ballet age group between 11-16' has the lowest value, while the chart shows other categories. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two charts and provide a more accurate summary of the data points rather than listing them in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the dance types, making it difficult to track which data point belongs to which category. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would enhance the logical progression of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the charts with basic terminology like 'highest percentage' and 'lowest value'. However, there are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Community hails' (likely meant 'halls') and 'on the same hand' (an incorrect idiom). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. To achieve a higher band, try to incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'account for', 'constitute', or 'a significant proportion', and ensure accurate spelling of key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'private studios has' instead of 'have') and punctuation (e.g., unnecessary spaces before commas). Some sentences are slightly disjointed, which affects the overall clarity. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on consistent subject-verb agreement and refining your use of articles and prepositions will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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