Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart gives information about the location of dance classes and bar chart illustrate the proportion of types of dance classes (by different ages) this is attending currently youth in a town in Australia.
Overall, the pie chart and bar chart are devide in different parts. The highest pie in the pie chart is private studios and the highest bar in the bar chart is ballet.
Firstly, regarding the location of dance classes in pie chart, the area for private studios is 48% it is the largest segment in the pie chart. Next, the area for schools halls is 24% is this open after school, following this the area for community hall and other is 18% and the last segment, area for college based studio is 10%.
Finally, regarding the types of dance classes in the bar chart by age group, The number of students under 11 in the ballet dance class is 600, and between 11 and 16 in the ballet dance class is 300. The number of students under 11 in the tap dance class is around 450, and between 11 and 16 in the tap dance class is 420. The number of students under 11 in the modern dance class is 300, and between 11 and 16 in the modern dance class is around 510.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of both charts. However, the overview is weak; it describes the charts themselves rather than summarizing the data trends. While the report includes specific figures, it lacks meaningful comparisons. For instance, it lists data for ballet and tap classes separately without highlighting that ballet is the most popular choice for the younger age group, while modern dance is preferred by the older group. To improve, focus on synthesizing the information to show relationships between the data points rather than just listing them.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'The number of...'). The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While the information is generally grouped by chart, the progression within the paragraphs is limited to a list-like format. Improving the use of linking words and referencing (e.g., 'the former', 'the latter', 'in contrast') would help create a smoother flow between sentences and ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several awkward phrasings, such as 'the highest pie in the pie chart' and 'devide in different parts'. The student relies on basic descriptors and repeats the same sentence structures, which limits the ability to convey information with sophistication. To reach a higher band, you should use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'segment', 'predominant', or 'fluctuation', and avoid repeating the same words in close proximity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'bar chart illustrate' (subject-verb agreement), 'this is attending currently youth' (word order), and '24% is this open' (incorrect clause structure). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and full stops. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction will significantly improve your accuracy.
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