Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart gives information about the location of dance classes and bar chart illustrate the proportion of types of dance classes (by different ages) this is attending currently youth in a town in Australia.
Overall, the pie chart and bar chart are devided ino different parts. The highest pie in the pie chart is private studios and the highest bar in the bar chart is ballet.
Firstly, regarding the location of dance classes in pie chart, the area for private studios is 48% it is the largest segment in the pie chart. Next, the area for schools hall is 24% is this open after school, following this the area for community halls and other is 18% and the last segment, area for college based studio is 10%.
Finally, regarding the types of dance classes in the bar chart by age group, The number of students under 11 in the ballet dance class is 600, and between 11 and 16 in the ballet dance class is 300. The number of students under 11 in the tap dance class is around 450, and between 11 and 16 in the tap dance class is 420. The number of students under 11 in the modern dance class is 300, and between 11 and 16 in the modern dance class is around 510.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the location and dance types. However, the overview is weak; it merely describes the charts as having 'different parts' rather than highlighting the key trends or significant differences. While the data is presented, the report lacks a clear synthesis. For example, it lists figures for ballet and tap without comparing them effectively across the age groups. To improve, you should focus on identifying the most prominent features, such as the dominance of private studios or the shift in popularity between age groups for modern dance, rather than just listing individual data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Next', 'Finally'). Some sentences are poorly linked, such as 'the area for schools hall is 24% is this open after school', which creates confusion. The progression of ideas is present but lacks sophistication. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence flows logically into the next without relying on simple, repetitive transitions.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'area' to describe percentages in a pie chart, which is inaccurate; 'proportion' or 'segment' would be more appropriate. There are also some awkward phrasings, such as 'the highest pie in the pie chart', which is not standard terminology. To improve, try to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'account for', 'constitute', or 'predominate', and ensure you use terms like 'percentage' or 'proportion' correctly when referring to chart data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For instance, 'bar chart illustrate' should be 'bar chart illustrates', and 'this is attending currently youth' is syntactically incorrect. There are also issues with punctuation and article usage (e.g., 'in pie chart' instead of 'in the pie chart'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic subject-verb agreement and word order prevents a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy.
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