Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart illustrates information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Overall, it is clear that the highest location of dance classes are private studios with 48%, the type of dance and age group here is Ballet, Tap and Modern with age under 11. And the lowest which is seen is college based studios with 10% along with Ballet, Tap and Modern with age 11-16.
Looking first at the highest percent which is Private studios with 48% location with type of dance classes like Ballet, Tap and Modern with age group under 11. Next is School halls (after- school) with 24% same types of dance classes but with age group of 11-16.
Turning to Community halls and other with 18% and same types of dance classes with age group 11-16. Lastly, College-based studios with 10% same types of dance classes but with under 11 age group.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the highest and lowest locations. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. While you have selected key data points, the comparison between the two charts (location and type) is not fully integrated. The description of the dance types is repetitive, as you state 'same types of dance classes' multiple times rather than grouping or synthesising the information effectively. To improve, focus on highlighting significant trends or contrasts rather than listing each category in isolation. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the relationship between age groups and locations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'Looking first at' and 'Turning to' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is hindered by the repetitive structure of the sentences. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when you mention 'same types of dance classes' without clearly linking them back to the specific data points in the charts. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows logically from the previous one would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on basic descriptors and repeat the same phrases throughout the text, such as 'same types of dance classes' and 'age group'. There is little attempt to use less common vocabulary or synonyms to describe the data (e.g., 'accounted for', 'constituted', 'the majority of'). While the meaning is clear, the lack of lexical range prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Incorporating more varied verbs and nouns related to data reporting would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the highest location of dance classes are private studios' (subject-verb agreement) and 'the lowest which is seen is college based studios' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence construction is often clunky. To achieve a higher band, you should aim for more error-free sentences and demonstrate better control over complex structures, such as using relative clauses or participial phrases to combine information more fluidly.
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