Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the pie chart and bar graph chart illuestrates information about , the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in australia and location of dance classes and different type of age group
By having a cursorry glance it is vivid that , the pie chart shows information regarding different locations of dance classes . firstly ; the private studio was most popular and on the top of choice of people mostly 48% people of population choose it. after that in australia yong people choose location 24 % of school halls . while , 18% like to choose community hall and others . moreover , only 10 % people choose collage base studios for dance classes
moving further ahead , the bar graph shows types of dance classes by different age group . firstly, under 11 and 11-16 years of age group equal number of students choose tap dance class group around 450- 470 number of students. moreover , ballet dance group choose 600 students on under 11 age group while , 11-16 age group only 300 students . furthermore another dance group name is modern age 11-16 only 550 students choose it while under 11 age group only 300 choose it
overall people prefer mostly private studios and school hall locations for dance classes moreover ,different age group choose different type of classes for dance
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying key trends such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related differences in dance class preferences. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention the percentages for locations, the comparison between age groups in the bar chart lacks precision; you describe the numbers as 'around 450-470' or '600', which is acceptable, but the overall summary is quite basic. To reach a higher band, ensure you clearly highlight the most significant differences and similarities rather than just listing data points. The overview is present but could be more integrated into the main body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'firstly', 'moreover', 'moving further ahead'). There are also issues with punctuation, such as the unnecessary use of semicolons and commas in awkward positions, which disrupts the flow of the text. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between ideas feels forced rather than natural. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring punctuation is used correctly would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'choose', 'people', and 'group' throughout the response. There are also several spelling errors ('illuestrates', 'cursorry', 'yong', 'collage') and word choice inaccuracies, such as using 'collage' instead of 'college'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'predominant', 'fluctuated', or 'accounted for'. The current level of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('the pie chart... illuestrates'), missing articles ('in australia'), and incorrect preposition usage. Punctuation is also a significant weakness; the erratic use of commas and semicolons makes some sentences difficult to parse. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and proofreading for basic errors will be beneficial.
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