Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrate the information about the location of dance classes attend by young people in australia town , as well as the kinds of dance classes taken by two different groups.
overall, private studios are the most popular location for dance classes , while co;;ege based studios account for the smallest proportion. In terms of dance types ballet is most popular among children under 11 while modern is more popular among those aged 11 to 16.
According to the pie chart, almost half of the dance classes are held in private studios accounted for 485. While only 10% of classes take place in college based studios. School hall are the second most common location accounting for 24% and about 18% for community hals and others.
On the other hand bar chart shows clear differences among the two differrent age groups.
Children under 11 ballet is the most popular choice, almost 600 students attending these classes. this is followed by tap at around 450 students, while modern class attracts about 300 students. By contrast modern dance is the most popular type among 11-16 year olds with roughly 500 students. Around 430 students attend tap classes in this group whereas ballet is the lowest accounted for 300 students attending.
overall younger children tend to prefer ballet while older modern.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts and provided relevant comparisons. You clearly highlighted the popularity of private studios and the contrasting preferences between age groups regarding dance styles. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, you mentioned '485' for private studios, which likely refers to a percentage or a misread figure, and you stated 'almost 600' for ballet, which lacks clarity regarding the unit of measurement. To improve, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed from the charts and that units (percentages vs. numbers) are clearly distinguished to avoid confusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on the two charts. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In terms of', 'According to', and 'By contrast' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by mechanical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'Children under 11 ballet is the most popular choice'. The transition between sentences could be smoother, and the use of referencing is sometimes unclear. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring consistent paragraph structure will help elevate your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'common location', and 'attending'. However, there are several spelling errors ('co;;ege', 'hals', 'differrent') and some word choice issues, such as 'accounted for 485' (which is grammatically and logically confusing). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling mistakes limit the score. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and proofreading for basic spelling and typographical errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('The bar chart illustrate'), missing articles ('ballet is the most popular'), and punctuation issues. Some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary prepositions, such as 'older modern', which is incomplete. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and pay closer attention to article usage and pluralization.
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