Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The rendered pie chart and bar graph depicts the given information about on the spot and types of dance tutorials youthful people in a township in Australia are present attending.
Overall, the maximum people are attending dance classes in private studios. Besides, the highest age group of people attend dance classes in ballet and tap, whereas the lowest aged group of individual attend modern classes.
In detail, the maximum individual people take part in private studios which is 48% in Australia. Australian people attend 10% College-based classes . After school, 24% citizens attend classes in school halls. Eventually, there are 18% electors attend classes in community hall and other in Australia town.
In case of modern classes, community attend least classes in modern type dance which is 300 students under the age of 11. There are 500 students attend modern classes under 11 of age group. Maximum students attend ballet and tap under 11- 16 age group. In ballet, people 600 student appear in under 11 and 300 in 116 age group. Under 11 aged group 450 students take classes in tap dance or 420 students do tap dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features of the charts, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the description of the bar chart is confusing, with contradictory figures provided for the 'under 11' age group. The summary lacks a clear overview of the relationship between age and dance type, and the data selection is somewhat disorganized. To improve, ensure that all figures cited are accurate and that the comparison between categories is logical and easy to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inappropriate, such as the use of 'Eventually' to introduce data or 'In case of' to start a paragraph. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. While there is a basic logical flow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structures make the text feel disjointed. Improving the variety of transition signals would significantly enhance the readability.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'maximum', 'people', and 'classes'. There are several instances of inappropriate word choice, such as 'electors' to describe people in a town, and 'youthful people' instead of 'young people'. Some phrases are unnatural, such as 'on the spot' and 'lowest aged group of individual'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description (e.g., 'proportion', 'age bracket', 'predominant') and avoid using words that do not fit the context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the maximum people are', 'individual people take part'), article usage, and pluralization. Some sentences are grammatically confusing, such as 'In ballet, people 600 student appear in under 11 and 300 in 116 age group.' These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent verb forms would help improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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