Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart and bar graph depict the information on the location and the sort of dance classes was attended by young individuals in a town in Australia. At a glance, the half of locations of dance classes was accumulated by private studios.

At first, private studios have the largest stake of location which is 48%. However, the rest of 52% of locations is shared among 3 different locations. School halls contains 24% of location which is the second largest stake of total stake of location. After that, Community halls & other accounted for 18% of location. Lastly, College based studios comes in with the least percentage of location which is 10%.

According to bar chart, the ballet dances contains the highest number of student who are under 11, which is around 600. The count of students in ballet from age 11-16 is just around 300. Similarly, in Modern type of dance classes the gap of number of students was inverted. which is around the 300 students who are under 11 and around 510 students from age group 11-16. While in tap dance, the count of both age group is quite same which is around 460 students who are under 11 and around 430 from the age group of 11-16.

While the tap dance contains the similar

Overall, There is a huge gap between the number of students from different groups in ballet and modern. However, the tap dance have minor gap in the count of students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the pie chart and bar graph. You successfully identified the main features, such as private studios being the most popular location and the contrasting trends in dance types across age groups. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. For example, you list the percentages for locations one by one rather than grouping them to highlight the dominance of private studios compared to the others. To improve, focus on synthesizing the data—grouping the 'minor' locations together—to provide a more concise overview. The conclusion is a bit repetitive, as it restates points already made in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each chart, and a summary. You use some cohesive devices like 'At first', 'However', and 'Similarly' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'After that' and 'comes in with the least percentage'. Additionally, there is a sentence fragment at the end of the second paragraph ('While the tap dance contains the similar') which disrupts the flow. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring every sentence is complete will help achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'stake', 'accounted for', and 'inverted'. However, there are several instances of unnatural word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'the sort of dance classes was attended' is grammatically awkward, and 'largest stake of location' is not the standard way to describe statistical data. Using 'proportion' or 'share' would be more precise. There is also some repetition of the word 'location' and 'count', which limits the sophistication of the response. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and statistical nouns will improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('School halls contains', 'tap dance have') and awkward passive constructions ('was accumulated by'). There are also punctuation and phrasing errors, such as the sentence fragment at the end of the second paragraph and the misuse of 'which' in 'inverted. which is'. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring subject-verb agreement and refining your use of complex sentences to avoid these recurring errors.

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