Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart and bar graph chart illustrate information about where young people in an Australian town attend dance classes and compare the different types of dance classes chosen by two age groups: under 11 and 11–16.
By having cursory glance it is vivid that ,
Almost half of all dance classes (48%) are held in private studios, making them the leading location. School halls used for after-school activities represent the second most common venue, accounting for 24% of classes. Community halls and other locations together make up 18%, while only 10% of classes are conducted in college-based studios.
moving further ahead , the bar graph chart shows Regarding the types of dance classes, ballet is the clear favorite among children under the age of 11, attracting significantly more participants than any other style in this age group. In contrast, teenagers aged 11 to 16 show a stronger preference for modern dance, with hip-hop also proving highly popular. Meanwhile, jazz attracts a fairly similar number of students in both age groups, suggesting that it appeals to children and teenagers a like
Overall , private studios dominate as the main location for dance classes, while preferences for dance styles vary noticeably according to age, with younger children favorite ballet and older students choosing more contemporary forms of dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all parts of the task well. You have successfully identified the main features of both the pie chart and the bar graph. The comparison between the two age groups is clear, and the data is accurately reported. To reach a higher band, ensure that you provide a more comprehensive overview that synthesizes the data rather than just listing facts. For example, you could have explicitly contrasted the total dominance of private studios with the specific age-related trends in dance styles more fluidly in the introduction or summary. Overall, the information is well-selected and relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. However, the use of cohesive devices is occasionally mechanical or awkward. Phrases like 'By having cursory glance it is vivid that' and 'moving further ahead' are somewhat unnatural and detract from the flow. While you use paragraphing effectively to separate the two charts, the transition between the location data and the dance style data could be smoother. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words will help elevate your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'leading location,' 'accounting for,' and 'contemporary forms.' However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'By having cursory glance' (should be 'At a cursory glance') and 'a like' (should be 'alike'). Additionally, the phrase 'favorite ballet' is grammatically incorrect in this context; it should be 'favor ballet' or 'prefer ballet.' While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully use complex sentences, there are several punctuation and grammatical errors, such as the unnecessary space before the comma in 'vivid that ,' and the lack of proper verb forms in 'younger children favorite ballet.' Some sentences are slightly disjointed due to these errors. To improve, focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and punctuation consistency. The majority of your sentences are clear, but more consistent accuracy in complex structures is required to reach the 7.0+ band.
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