Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two chart illustrates the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The pie chart shows the location of dance classes such as private studios and college based. The bar chart describes the variety of dance classes are taken by different age group.

Firstly, there are different location such as private studious has highest 48 percentage of people. In the school halls 24% of young people goes for dance. The community halls and other places has 18% of youth and lastly, college based studios has least amount of classes location.

Secondly, there are 2 age groups such as under 11 and age between 11-16. Children under 11 lies highest in the dance ballet and tab which is 600 and 440 respectively, where age between 11-16 are between [redacted phone]. In the modern dance age 11-16 are more than 500 children and 300 youngster are under 11.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by summarizing the two charts, but the development of ideas is limited. While you identify the main features, such as the highest percentage for private studios and the age group trends, the analysis lacks depth. For instance, you mention the figures for ballet and tap but do not provide a clear comparison between the two age groups for all dance types. The report would benefit from a more comprehensive overview that synthesizes the data rather than simply listing figures. Additionally, the final sentence is incomplete, which hinders the overall clarity of the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' to signal the transition between the two charts. However, the flow within paragraphs is somewhat mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the comparison between age groups becomes confusing. To improve, try using a wider range of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother progression of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You rely on simple descriptors like 'highest' and 'least amount'. There are also some errors in word choice and form, such as 'studious' instead of 'studios' and 'tab' instead of 'tap'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary to describe trends and data, such as 'predominant', 'account for', or 'a significant proportion'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetition and demonstrate greater control over the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The two chart illustrates', 'there are different location') and incorrect pluralization ('studious', 'youngster'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure in the final paragraph is disjointed. To improve, focus on ensuring subject-verb agreement and proofreading for basic errors in articles and plurals. Incorporating more varied, error-free complex sentences will also help improve your score in this criterion.

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