Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart depicts the information regarding location of dance classes and types of dance classes by age group is illustrated by the bar chart in a town in Australia .

Overall, it is apparent that private studios shows the highest proportion in comparison to others, however, teenagers most interested in modern type of dance classes.

At the first glance, it is evident that nearly the half percentage of students prefer private studios, which is accounted for 48%. However, a difference of one tenth can be witnessed in community halls and others and college based studios in which 18% of pupils use former one and 10% prefer latter one. 24% of learners prefer to dance at school halls after school .

Moving towards the rest of information, it is evident that more that 600 of under the age of 11 students prefer ballet dance classes , which is doubled teenagers. Whereas, a difference of nearly 10 learners can be seen in the type of tap dance class in which 410 under the age of 11 students join and 420 students are from teen age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the response lacks precision in reporting data. For example, stating 'nearly the half percentage' is vague, and the comparison between ballet and teenagers is confusingly phrased. To improve, ensure that all figures are clearly linked to their respective categories and that comparisons are mathematically accurate. While you covered the main trends, the analysis of the bar chart could be more detailed to fully satisfy the requirements for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'At the first glance', and 'Moving towards', which provide a basic framework. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Moving towards the rest of information'. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for instance, 'former one' and 'latter one' are used, but the preceding sentence structure makes it difficult to identify exactly which categories are being referenced. Improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the basic information. You use terms like 'proportion', 'depicts', and 'witnessed'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'nearly the half percentage' (which is awkward) and 'teenagers most interested' (missing the verb 'are'). There is also a lack of variety in reporting data, as you rely heavily on simple structures. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your collocations are natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'private studios shows' (subject-verb agreement error), 'more that 600' (should be 'more than'), and 'under the age of 11 students' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and refining sentence construction will significantly improve your accuracy.

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