Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate information on the location and types of dance classes that young people are attending in a town in Australia.
Overall, private studios are the most popular places for dance classes. In contrast, college-based studios are at least priority. Majority of students under 11 are interested in attending Ballet dance classes whereas fewer with age group 11-16 are engaged in this type. However, Modern dance classes are the most common among students with age 11-16, and individuals under 11 show little interest in this type.
In terms of location, about 48% of dance classes held in private studios making it the most famous location for dance. Secondly, school halls (after-school) allow around 24% of classes. Thirdly, approximately 18% of classes given in community halls and other, almost 10% are in college-based studios which is the least popular.
For types of dance classes, about 600 students with age group under 11 joined Ballet dance classes, around 450 learners in Tap dance and 300 in Modern dance classes, showing a visible decrease in their interest. On the other hand, the number of students attention who are 11 -16 increased considerably in number usually 300 in Ballet , about 4200 in Tap, and around 500 students in Modern dance type.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task, providing a clear overview and selecting key features from both charts. You successfully identified the most popular location and the contrasting trends in dance types between the two age groups. However, there is a significant data error in the final paragraph: you stated 'about 4200 in Tap' for the 11-16 age group, which is a misreading of the chart (likely 420). This inaccuracy impacts the reliability of your report. To improve, ensure that data points are transcribed precisely, as accuracy is a fundamental requirement for Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on location and dance types respectively. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'In terms of', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the number of students attention who are 11-16'. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns or references clearly point to the intended subject will help elevate your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrate', 'engaged', and 'considerably'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'at least priority' (instead of 'lowest priority'), 'most famous location' (instead of 'most popular'), and 'number of students attention' (which is grammatically incorrect). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and descriptive adjectives will also help you convey information more naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'about 48% of dance classes held in private studios' lacks a main verb, and 'usually 300 in Ballet' is an inappropriate use of the adverb 'usually'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. To improve, focus on ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofread specifically for small grammatical slips that occur when you attempt more complex structures.
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