Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The povided piechart below depicts information by sekecting and repporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent
overall, the highest location of dancing classes is private studios and the lowest is college based studios.
It is cristal clear that the highest location of dance classes is private studios that is 48% while in the location of dance classes community halls and other have 18% however school halls 24% students are location of dancing classes moving further college based studios have 105 location of dance classes .
on the other hand, under age group of 11 are balled in 6005 have nevertheless 11 to 16 age group percentage is only 300.
but in the tap under 11 group of aged are 450 percent while on 11 and 16 aged are in 430 percent there on the other hand modern under age group are 300 percent and the 11and 16 aged group are 500 above .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately interpret the data. The student includes irrelevant introductory text copied from the prompt and provides data that is mathematically impossible (e.g., '450 percent'). The overview is weak, and the reporting of figures is highly inaccurate, making it difficult to follow the trends. The response fails to clearly compare the two charts, and the information provided does not reflect the actual data presented in the visual. Consequently, the response does not adequately cover the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward use of 'nevertheless' and 'moving further'. The referencing is unclear, and the overall arrangement of information is confusing, which hinders the reader's ability to follow the summary of the charts.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often misused. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'povided', 'piechart', 'sekecting', 'repporting', 'cristal', 'balled'). The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, resulting in nonsensical phrases like '450 percent'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the errors frequently impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is poor. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement and preposition usage (e.g., 'under age group of 11 are balled'). The response relies on simple, often fragmented sentences, and there is no evidence of complex sentence structures. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand.
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